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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Aug. 3 2013 at 4:18 pm
love.writing BRONZE, St. Clair Shores, Michigan
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This poem was amazing!  The last stanza really awed me.  I'm also new to this site so if you could check out my work when it's publiished that would be great. 

on Aug. 1 2013 at 7:47 am
DerickJerome BRONZE, Cleveland, Ohio
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To Live The Life You Seek , Be The best you Can be.

WOW!!!!!!!! This is really good . . Keep it up . And if you get a chance check out my poem "Only in Fairy Tales"

on Jul. 29 2013 at 5:57 pm
SoImAWriterNow BRONZE, Schenectady, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;But better to get hurt by the truth than comforted with a lie.&quot; -Khaled Hosseini<br /> <br /> and<br /> <br /> &quot;Don&#039;t walk behind me; I may not lead. Don&#039;t walk in front of me; I may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend.&quot; Albert Camus

This comment probably won't mean much since you have over 1,000 but I just had to say that this poem left me stunned. I don't know why though. I loved the rhyming in it and the flow but the ending struck me so hard. That's how I know a poem's great. When it leaves my mind reeling and me speechless. You deserved to have this published. Great job :)

on Jul. 29 2013 at 11:21 am
Scarlett.Blazing BRONZE, Oundle, Peterborough, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Stars are just pinholes in the curtain of night.

wow... i really enjoyed your work! its a very stylish way to get across what your saying and i enjoyed it :)

on Jul. 25 2013 at 8:59 pm
catwithglasses SILVER, Sewickley, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;m selfish, impatient, and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can&#039;t handle me at my worst, then you don&#039;t deserve me at my best.&quot;<br /> -Marilyn Monroe

I really like this. It shows what it feels like to be imprisoned and chained in sort of a subtle way.

on Jul. 22 2013 at 11:12 pm
ss.Heart SILVER, San Jose, California
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You try you fail,you try you fail, but the only true failure is when you stop trying.

Felling bound and chained is a terrible feeling and your poem personified this! Please read my work and let me know what you think :) -Sylvia Silverheart

on Jul. 21 2013 at 3:37 pm
StarGazer9 GOLD, Marana, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Never let the odds keep you from doing what you know in your heart you were meant to do.&quot;

Ya sure, but in this poem "birdie" is reffered to as an actual bird. When he saw the bird it made him want to fly. Makes sense to me!

on Jul. 17 2013 at 3:09 pm
Bluetooth13 SILVER, A Town In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
To play a wrong note is insignificant, to play without passion is inexcusable.<br /> <br /> ~ Ludwig van Beethoven

Good job! :) check out my work@

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on Jul. 15 2013 at 8:42 pm
princesse, Anderson, South Carolina
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i love animals

nice job :}

on Jul. 13 2013 at 9:49 am
STATEN ISLAND WOO!! I just had to do that lol. Beautifu poem

on Jul. 12 2013 at 12:57 pm
Quratulain BRONZE, Karachi, Other
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&quot;Love is what is left in the relationship when selfishness has been taken out.&quot;

You really write well.Loved it !

on Jul. 11 2013 at 1:58 pm
Jay-Wolf PLATINUM, Cedar Hills, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The man who takes offense when offence is not intended is a fool<br /> However the man who takes offence when it is intended is an even greater fool&quot;<br /> Ralph Waldo Emerson

Dude you did great, also i just joined so it would be great if you could check out some of my               (finnaly added) poems and give some feed back

on Jul. 10 2013 at 12:24 pm
LittleMissLostInParadise GOLD, Cumberland, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;We live in a strange bubble&quot;<br /> -Brian Molko

The term "birdie" is reffering to golf, a score in which the ball is hit into the hole using one stroke fewer than the accepted standard number of strokes par for that hole.

on Jul. 9 2013 at 4:22 pm
paigeswifka GOLD, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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This is an incredible piece. The way that the narrator spoke from an almost child-like point of view really helped to show the theme that you were aiming to send your readers. The innocent voice used really helped to tie the poem together.

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on Jun. 23 2013 at 3:22 pm
juneday GOLD, Barrington, Rhode Island
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Love the first stanza - in the second and third, I feel like the rhymes are really forced and don't make sense. "Birdie?" But I also like the last stanza. Overall, great theme - maybe edit a little more.

on Jun. 22 2013 at 10:20 am
MoonNymph775 BRONZE, Oakdale, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Don&#039;t follow your dreams, lead them.

Love the ending! 

on Jun. 13 2013 at 10:15 pm
ScarletBluez BRONZE, Jericho, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Literature is a luxury; fiction is a necessity.&quot;(Gilbert K. Chesterton)

I really love the simplistic tone conveying childhood naivety yet the topic in question is so deep.It is very well written, a truly beautiful poem, and I can relate to it so well. Thank you for your lovely piece, keep writing :)

on Jun. 12 2013 at 4:24 pm
chocolatina PLATINUM, Northbrook, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;God gives his toughest battles to his strongest soldiers.&quot;

it stinks to have those kind of parents

on Jun. 9 2013 at 11:01 am
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness&quot;

I like your work alot, i was expecting i different type of poem by reading the title but once i finished it i was amazed how different it was way to go

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on May. 31 2013 at 3:57 am
Beatles SILVER, Chennai, Other
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This poem would make realllly great lyrics for a rap :D if only Eminem reads this... :p 
Keep your fingers crossed! ;) :)